“Mum can I pleas go on the X Box” said Eric. “Yes Eric” said mum. I hoped on the X Box and I put in my game called... NEED FOR SPEED HOT PURSUIT. Oh No! The racers are crashing into me. Helicopter in bound.
I agree with Mr Mossop, Eric. You need to write some more as this story was getting exciting. What a great way to capture your audience by leaving us wanting more. Nice job.
exciting writing Eric - now I want to know what happens next!
ReplyDeleteI agree with Mr Mossop, Eric. You need to write some more as this story was getting exciting. What a great way to capture your audience by leaving us wanting more. Nice job.
ReplyDeleteEric I love to see you getting excited about your writing. I agree that I want to hear what happens next...
ReplyDeleteI love this piece of writing Eric and can't wait to read what happens next. Keep up the great work son. Love, Mum xxx
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